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Redneck Smurfette
Super Smurf
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posted 08-09-2016 04:28 PM
Brilliant! Can't wait to read it lassie;)
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Squeaky Smurf
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posted 08-11-2016 08:48 AM
Just today I'd just finished reading the last chapters of your fanfic, Ariel. It's becoming thrilling more and more. Smurfy congrats!! ![[Happy Smurf]](graemlins/Happy_Smurf.gif)
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 08-15-2016 06:37 AM
Sorry it took so long, smurfs, I decided to change the title of this chapter... ![[Wild Smurf]](graemlins/Wild_Smurf.gif)
Chapter Thirty-One:There's Something About Victor...
Papa and the other Smurfs were up on the roof with Patrick. They were waiting on Grace and Smurfette to get done helping Ariel get something to wear. That’s when Victor, Blue’s grandfather came up and joined them.
“Hello, lads!” Victor said once he saw them. “What brings you Smurfs back to New York?”
The Smurfs and Patrick related the whole story of what had happened over the last few days. The reason the Smurfs had come; the Winslows’ odd visitor, Ariel; the Fairy Queen, Mersandra; Ariel’s special ability to see visions; and the fact that Ariel was now a Smurf.
After hearing all of this, Victor didn’t seem very surprised. In fact, it almost seemed that he understood everything he had just been told, this confused not only the Smurfs, but Patrick as well. Victor seemed to be very different as to the first time he had met the Smurfs.
A few minutes had passed before anyone spoke again. Finally, Victor asked, “Did this -- Ariel -- did she have any special ‘visions’ lately?”
Papa thought about keeping Ariel’s vision a secret, but he remembered what happened last time he kept a vision of his own to himself. “Yes,” he finally gave in. “Yes, she has.”
The other Smurfs’ eyes widened in fright as they heard the chilling details of Ariel’s vision the day before.
“Sounds awful, lad,” Victor said. “Must’ve scared the daylights out of her.”
“Yes, it did,” Papa replied, heaving a sigh and feeling guilty for having repeated what his daughter had told him. “It frightened me, too…”
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 02-09-2018 06:15 AM
Hey Smurfs, I'm just going to be posting chapters off the top of my head for now I hope that you guys are ok with that.
Chapter Thirty-two: The New Look (part one)
I was bathing in the bathroom sink while Miss Grace and Smurfette began to work on my new clothes... I could hear them talking in hushed voices as they worked.
"Did you ever know about her, Smurfette?" I heard Miss Grace ask, "I mean, I thought you were the first girl they knew..."
"I heard of her," Smurfette replied, "but I always thought it was just a myth Papa made up to make me feel less like I was the only girl. I didn't think she was real..."
I heard them go on like this for a while. I finished bathing, wrapped up in a washcloth that was neatly folded by the edge of the sink, tied up my hair as best I could, and drained the water out of the basin. I walked over to the edge of the bathroom counter and leapt to the floor. About to go under the door, I realized that it was going to be almost impossible to get through without getting dirty again. So I stepped back far enough away from the door so I wouldn't be knocked over and called out to Miss Grace.
"Excuse me," I said, "I'm done, now and I was wondering if you would mind helping me with the door, please."
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SmurfBoeing
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posted 02-10-2018 08:34 PM
This is just stunning! I thought fanfics were riddled with mistakes but this is awesome!
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SmurfBoeing
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posted 02-10-2018 09:26 PM
It’s nearly perfect! One of my favorite features is that it’s broken up into small chapters, so anyone can read as much as they want at a time! The grammar is great too! I also like that the story has a defined universe, like Smurfs/Smurfs 2.
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 02-11-2018 07:15 AM
I'm going to post what I can think of right now... If any changes occur, I will try to make changes to it and let you know.
Chapter Thirty-two: The New Look (part two)
I heard Miss Grace's footsteps as she strode to the door. The door swung open and I was almost blown over by the disturbance to the air. I then felt myself being lifted up off the floor.
"Frankly speaking," I said, "I feel a bit... Uncomfortable at this size... I'm much more used to being human sized and independent."
"I'm smurfily sure that you will learn to like it," Smurfette chimed in, "especially once you get home to Smurf Village."
I hopped down onto the bed from Miss Grace's hands. I quickly found my clothes and shoes and put them on. Suddenly I felt something being set on top of my head. I looked into a mirror and saw myself, the view was slightly blurry, though, seeing as my glasses were still far too large for me to put on. But what I saw in the mirror... It was so different from the way I used to look, but it actually felt like I was finally myself.
"Wow..." I said, squinting at my reflection. "I guess it's not so bad..."
Miss Grace helped me brush my hair and we walked out into the drawing room. Miss Grace set us down on the sofa.
"I'll go get the boys," she said as she ran out the door.
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SmurfBoeing
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posted 02-11-2018 08:14 PM
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Originally posted by Ariel, The Lost Smurfette:
I'm really glad you enjoy it...
Say, I like to get feedback from my readers on the content my stories...
Is there anything specific in the story that you liked more than others?
I dunno, this is the first true fanfic I’ve read.
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SmurfBoeing
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posted 02-12-2018 01:01 PM
It’s a tough choice but I really like how Ariel had smurf blue spots/patches as a human.
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 02-13-2018 05:30 AM
Chapter Thirty-three: Brainy's Little Blue Heartthrob (part one)
Brainy Smurf sat in silent shock at what Papa had said about the vision that Ariel had told him she had seen.
What kind of a monster was this warlock? he wondered, who would commit such an atrocity?
He wasn't sure he if he wanted to know the answer to that.
Suddenly, Grace arrived at the top of the stairs.
"Alright, fellas," she said. "It's safe to come back, now."
They walked in the door to the apartment, and saw something in the floor.
"What is--" Master Winslow started to exclaim, "What on Earth is in the floor, Grace?"
Brainy lept down from Patrick's shoulder and approached the trail of long brown strands. Pulling out a magnifying glass from under his hat, he examined it to discover that it was a long trail of hair. He followed it, looking into his magnifying glass the whole way, stopping only when he found that beside the trail of hair, was a pair of bare blue feet.
He froze for a moment, put his magnifying glass away, and looked up at the owner of both the hair and the feet. It was Ariel...
Her long hair, which seemed to be probably a good ten, no, twenty feet in length, had led him right to her. The new dress that she was now wearing was made from the one she had as a human, the design was very different, though. With flowers embroidered along the hemming, and a slightly ruffled top, most likely an attempt to conceal the clear difference in shape between her and Smurfette. Where Smurfette was more of a straight line in figure, Ariel had a bit of an hour glass form.
She didn't have her glasses, so she was forced to have to squint a little.
Brainy's heart pounded in his chest.
He tried to catch his breath, but couldn't. He became dizzy as everything went black and he felt himself hit the floor...
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 03-01-2018 08:41 AM
Chapter Thirty-three: Brainy's Little Blue Heartthrob (part two)
Brainy came to, not sure if what he had seen was real or not. But he had a strange feeling... Not an unpleasant feeling, it was actually a very nice feeling. Whatever that feeling was caused a tiny voice in the back of his mind to scream out to him. As if it were trying to tell him that he seriously, desperately wanted to see Ariel in this form again.
He opened his eyes to see the others staring at him in concern. Not a single one dared to utter a word as he stood up, brushed the dust off of his pants and looked around. It was clear to them what--actually, who-- he was looking for.
"Brainy," Gutsy grabbed his shoulder, causing him to jump. "Are you smurfing okay lad?"
Brainy could feel the sweat forming in bullets on his face. He blinked and smiled nervously. "What are you talking about? I'm fine! I was just... Tired! Yeah, that's it... Nothing to worry about! ![[Big Grin]](biggrin.gif) ![[Embarrassed]](redface.gif) "
Hefty, who was also standing nearby, cautiously prepared for Brainy to swoon again nodded his head sceptically. "Uh huh... Sure... I saw you back there... All smurfy gaga over the new girl. ![[Wink]](wink.gif) "
"I most smurftainly am not!" Brainy protested.
But he knew, in his heart, that the other Smurfs were right. He did in fact, have a soft spot for the girl they called the Lost Smurfette. He stared dreamily as he watched her stand beside Papa while they figured out how to get her shoes and glasses to Smurf size.
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 03-09-2018 05:57 AM
Ok guys... if you're reading from the beginning, you will remember that this is a Smurfs/Harry Potter crossover story, one where Moody is alive and his twin brother is Blue's grandpa, Victor Doyle, who is very sick... Moody made a supply of pollyjuice potion and Doyle gave him some of his hair for the mix, so that Moody could go in his brother's place to New York... of course, I would not have written about it if it weren't important to the whole story...
Chapter Thirty-four: Moody's Suply Runs Short
As he watched the little blue creatures scurry about with their business, Moody felt a strangely familiar sensation... He was changing back to himself!
Quickly, he took a swig from his flask of pollyjuice potion, and realized that he was running out of time, and potion.
He knew he was going to have to brew a new batch... But how? He was miles away from his brother and he didn't have his potion set with him... Nor did he have any of the ingredients he needed to make more...
He finally came to the conclusion that he was going to have to either leave, or let them know the truth...
The previous option would make him seem rude and cowardly, whereas the latter was a more preferable choice, but he knew that it was also a very dangerous one... He could be arrested for using magic around muggles without obliviating them after the fact...
But these people... And those "Smurfs," as they were called, needed his help, he was never the type to back down, unless he was instructed to do so by someone of respectable authority.
"It's going to have to happen," he muttered to himself, "I can't help them if they don't know the truth... About everything."
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Ariel author of The Lost Smurfette
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posted 03-11-2018 05:05 PM
Chapter Thirty-five: I Have... Powers?!?
It was difficult for me to see, still, but I did see Brainy faint after seeing me in my Smurf clothes... Smurfette guided me to the edge of the sofa, where I jumped down and was caught by a pair of strong, blue arms I assumed belonged to the one that they called Hefty Smurf.
"Wow," I heard him exclaim as he let me down onto my feet. "Not too smurfy... The clothes look pretty good, too."
"Uh, thanks," I said awkwardly, gathering up what little senses I had at the moment. It was quite disconcerting to be so small, it was even worse that I couldn't see anything past my arms reach.
Suddenly, I felt a hand on my shoulder again. I looked in the direction of the pressure, and saw the unmistakable hat and beard of Papa Smurf.
"I'm certain that you would like to have your glasses so you can see what is going on, right?" He asked kindly.
Nodding my head, I replied, "Yes, sir," I said, "it's really blurry, and I'm going to get a smurfache if I continue to go about without them."
Internally, I was astounded. I was already speaking the Smurf tongue... It was extremely odd to me. But it also felt very natural.
Papa chuckled warmly and led me over to where my specticals lay on the floor. Once we approached them, I took a seat on the little bridge between the lenses. Papa examined my glasses from all around the room. "This is going to be difficult to figure out." He muttered as he circled me studiously. "What to do?"
I sighed. "It's going to be hard to get something that is so large to become so small... Is it possible at all?"
Suddenly I felt myself falling off the bridge of my huge glasses and to the floor.
I looked around and saw that my bifocals had become the perfect size for my head. I quickly put them on, and then I saw the astounded looks on the faces of everyone in the room.
"Wait," I said, realizing that even Papa Smurf was amazed at what just happened. "Did I just do that?"
Everyone else nodded their heads in silent shock. I had done that.
"You mean," I stammered in astonishment, "I have... Powers?!?"
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posted 03-13-2018 05:06 AM
Ok, Smurfs... Here's where you (the readers) find out a bit of interesting details about our main character from Papa Smurf... This also affects another Smurf as well... Can you guess what it is?
Chapter Thirty-six: "Incredible!"
Papa Smurf was astonished to see what happened with Ariel's glasses. They had shrunk before his very eyes when Ariel touched them.
"I have... Powers?" Ariel stammered as she shakily placed her glasses on her face.
"Yes," Papa replied, approaching her cautiously, so that she would not become nervous; for he had learned a long time ago that nervousness and magic don't mix.
"How'd she do that?" He heard Gutsy whisper to Hefty. "I thought Papa was the only Smurf with magic..."
"Me, too," Hefty mumbled back, "but I guess that's not right anymore."
Papa Smurf realized that Ariel must have inherited her powers from Queen Mersandra, her and Clumsy's mother.
Why didn't Clumsy have magic, then? Papa wondered. Surely, if they are twins, they should both have powers, right?
"Just to be sure it really was your doing," Papa said, "might as well try to see if you can make your shoes Smurfs size..."
"Ok," Ariel said, walking, almost reluctantly, over to where her shoes sat in the floor.
Papa watched closely as she tapped the footwear with one finger. The shoes slowly but surely shrank to fit Ariel's feet.
"Incredible!" He exclaimed, walking over to his bewildered daughter. "It seems as if you've inherited some magical capabilities!" He tried to keep the thought of who she inherited those traits from to himself; She isn't ready to know that yet... Neither of them are...
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Squeaky Smurf
Hering Smurf
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posted 03-13-2018 09:51 AM
Wow, new discoveries! This fanfic of yours is getting more and more thrilling, SmurfyDove!!
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