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dogboo22 / Brunette / Greedette / President Smurfette / Summer Smurfette
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posted 05-11-2012 06:46 AM
Chapter one
It was a typical afternoon in the smurf village, Handy was working on the dam,Papa was working on a potion, and Greedy was baking yummy goodies. But a few smurfs were totally bored! those smurfs were Hefty Smurf,Tuffy Smurf,Tracker smurf and Jokey. "I wonder what we should do?" Tracker groaned "We could take a hike?" Tuffy suggested "Okay." the friends agreed. "Its a really nice day!" Hefty said " Yeah!" Jokey said. Meanwhile in another village. Where Smurfs and Smurfette's lived. It was a nice cozy village. The sun was bright and hot, Bloomette loved warm days! She had a lovely garden in the back of her green house. Bloomette had dirty blonde hair with light brown strikes she has a dark green hat and a purple shirt with blue jeans. Bloomette's best friend was Earthette. Earthette has short red hair some ripped shorts and a light green shirt that has a picture of earth on it. Most of the smurfs and smurfette's were at lunch that Gourmette made them. Gourmette had dark brown hair that went to her shoulders, she wore a light purple shirt with light blue pants and she had a bakers hat and an apron around her wast. "Right now I'm working on my greatest invention ever!!!" Clever smurf said to his fellow smurfs and smurfette's "Cool Clever!" Trendy Smurf said. Trendy smurf was married to Trendette. He was always looking fashionable. He always has time for others. he wheres a black tuxedo. Clever Smurf had dark blue overalls with a light blue shirt underneath, he has one son named Expert Smurfling. "I wonder where Teacher Smurfette is!" Trendette asked her friends "Probably teaching her class." Clever said "Yeah." his friends agreed. At Teacher Smurfette's class room her students were listening to the story of peter rabbit. The smurflings there were Expert Smurfling, Blushette Smurfling, Breezy Smurfling and Peppermint smurfling. "So smurflings how do you like the story?" Teacher Smurfette asked "We loved it!" the young smurfs cried! Teacher has honey colored hair that was mid-back, she had a long green skirt with a light green shirt and the letters "ABC" on it. She almost always had a smile on her face.
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SmurfFan82874
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posted 05-11-2012 09:49 AM
You have a good start there, Greedette! ![[Big Grin]](biggrin.gif) Might I suggest you break your writing down into paragraphs? That would make it a bit easier to read. Good job!
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dogboo22 / Brunette / Greedette / President Smurfette / Summer Smurfette
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posted 05-11-2012 10:58 AM
Here is a copy of it that is corrected.
It was a typical afternoon in the smurf village, Handy was working on the dam, Papa was working on a potion, and Greedy was baking yummy goodies. But a few smurfs were totally bored! Those smurfs were Hefty Smurf, Tuffy Smurf, Tracker smurf and Jokey Smurf. "I wonder what we should do." Tracker groaned "We could take a hike?" Tuffy suggested "Okay." the friends agreed. "It’s a really nice day!" Hefty said "Yeah!" Jokey said. Meanwhile in another village, where Smurfs and Smurfette's lived. It was a nice cozy village. The sun was bright and hot, Bloomette loved warm days! She had a lovely garden in the back of her green house. Bloomette had dirty blonde hair with light brown strikes she has a dark green hat and a purple shirt with blue jeans. Bloomette's best friend was Earthette. Earthette has short red hair some ripped shorts and a light green shirt that has a picture of earth on it. Most of the smurfs and smurfette's were at lunch that Gourmette made them. Gourmette had dark brown hair that went to her shoulders, she wore a light purple shirt with light blue pants and she had a baker’s hat and an apron around her waist. "Right now I'm working on my greatest invention ever!!!" Clever smurf said to his fellow smurfs and smurfette's "Cool Clever!" Trendy Smurf said. Trendy smurf was married to Trendette. He was always looking fashionable. He always has time for others. He wears a black tuxedo. Clever Smurf had dark blue overalls with a light blue shirt underneath; he has one son named Expert Smurfling. "I wonder where Teacher Smurfette is!" Trendette asked her friends "Probably teaching her class." Clever said "Yeah." his friends agreed. At Teacher Smurfette's class room her students were listening to the story of peter rabbit. The smurflings there were Expert Smurfling, Blushette Smurfling, Breezy Smurfling, and Peppermint Smurfling. "So smurflings how do you like the story?" Teacher Smurfette asked "We loved it!" the young smurfs cried! Teacher has honey colored hair that was mid-back; she had a long green skirt with a light green shirt and the letters "ABC" on it. She almost always had a smile on her face.
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Jokie Smurf
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posted 05-11-2012 11:41 AM
I corrected all of the spelling and grammatical issues, but I forgot to separate that into paragraphs for her.
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Amy Sue Smurfette
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posted 05-11-2012 11:49 AM
i love it so far love all the new characters and can't wait to learn more about them :-)
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dogboo22 / Brunette / Greedette / President Smurfette / Summer Smurfette
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posted 05-11-2012 12:54 PM
Thanks
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posted 05-11-2012 01:19 PM
Chapter two
Meanwhile back with Hefty,Tracker,Tuffy and Jokey. "Hey guys! Look at these footprints!" Jokey yelled to his friends. "Cool! i wonder who made them?" Hefty asked "I don't know." His friends said. "Look at this!!" Tuffy yelled. The other smurfs looked where Tuffy was pointing and they saw a red and white bow. "Hmm i wonder who was here."Tracker said "Smell it Tracker!" Jokey said "Okay." Tracker agreed. Tracker smelled the bow and said "I think the smurf went this way!" Tracker said while running "Lets go!" is friends said while taking off after him.
Meanwhile in the other village the smurflings were all in there house. " Expert!" Breezy said "Yes Breezy?" Expert said looking up from his math book "I need help with my math test." Breezy said. "Okay." Expert replied. Then the smurflings heard a knock on the door and when they answered they saw Imaginette Smurfette and Artsy Smurf ( There the parents of Peppermint) standing there. "Hi, smurflings!" Imaginette said. "Hi." the smurflings said "What brings you here?" Expert said "Well its Peppermint's birthday!" Artsy Smurf said. Peppermint smiled.
"Here's your present!" Imaginette said handing her a gift "Cool! Roller-skates!" Peppermint said. "Hey Peppermint, where's your red and white bow?" Artsy said "I think i lost it in the forest." Peppermint said. "Okay." her parents said.
In Gourmette's kitchen she was making smurfberry salad for the adults and Pasta for the smurflings. "Ah le disque dur étant un chef !(translation: Ah its hard being a chef!)". Then she rang the dinner bell and everybody came running in.
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With a good attitude no one can bring you down - Carnation
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Amy Sue Smurfette
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posted 05-11-2012 05:41 PM
ooohh yum pasta and i wonder if Expert is going to be the Brainy Smurf of that village?
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posted 05-11-2012 05:44 PM
Yeah, this story is getting very good!
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When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
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posted 05-12-2012 08:33 AM
Chapter three
"Are we almost there?" Jokey groaned as they were running though the forest "Yes, we just need to turn at that oak tree, then i think we go under that bush." Tracker said "Okay." his friends said. After the smurfs climbed under the bush they saw a big wall with green ivy allover it. "Wow! How are we going to climb it!" Tuffy exclaimed "Yeah!" Hefty and Jokey said starring up at the large wall. Then the smurfs heard some laughing and talking on the other side! "Um is anybody over there!" Hefty yelled.
Meanwhile on the other side the smurfs and smurfette's were all eating there lunch that Gourmette made them. "Hey! Did you guys hear something?" Clever asked Trendy "Yeah!" Trendy said. "Weird!" Bloomette and Earthette said at the same time. Then the smurf and smurfette' heard a voice coming from the other side of the wall (again!) "Ah what was that!" Gourmette screamed "I'll go take a look." Clever said. "I'll go to." Mendette Smurfette said. The two smurfs went over the wall quietly "Wow who are they!" Mendette whispered to Clever. "Who knows?" Clever said.
"Do you think they heard us?" Tuffy asked Hefty "I don't know." Hefty said "Hey! i heard something!" Tracker said "What did it sound like?" Jokey asked looking around "It sounded like someone whispering." Tracker said "Lets look around then!" Tuffy said "Okay." his friends said. Then the smurfs split up to search the place.
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Jokie Smurf
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posted 05-12-2012 08:49 AM
Ooh, kinda a cliffhanger if you ask me. You are doing very well with the paragraphs Greedette. I am loving this so far. ![[Wink]](wink.gif)
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posted 05-12-2012 08:51 AM
Oooh thanks so much!
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posted 05-12-2012 09:00 AM
I'll write more in awhile.
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posted 05-12-2012 09:01 AM
Nice
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posted 05-12-2012 01:55 PM
Thanks
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posted 05-12-2012 01:58 PM
No Problem
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When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
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posted 05-12-2012 05:13 PM
Here's a picture of Gourmette.
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posted 05-12-2012 05:17 PM
Nice! ![[Smile]](smile.gif)
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When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
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posted 05-12-2012 05:21 PM
Thanks Jokie!!!
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posted 05-12-2012 05:31 PM
No Problem.
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When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
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posted 05-12-2012 07:47 PM
GREAT picture she looks smurftastic :-D
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posted 05-13-2012 10:33 AM
Thanks Nurturer Smurf
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posted 05-13-2012 11:15 AM
Cool
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posted 05-13-2012 03:58 PM
Chapter four
"Hey who are you two?" Tuffy asked to smurfs "Uh I'm-" "Did you find something?" Hefty called "Yeah, i found to smurfs hiding!" Tuffy called back. And when he looked at the smurfs he saw one smurf with dark blue overalls, and a light blue shirt underneath. And the girl with him had bleach blonde hair that was in a ponytail and a pink skirt with a purple shirt. She had pins in her hat just like Tailor. Then Hefty,Tracker and Jokey ran over. "Hey who you two?" Jokey asked "I-I I'm Mendette." The smurfette said nervously, "I am Clever Smurf." The smurf in the overalls said. "I'm Hefty, and these are Tuffy,Tracker, and Jokey." Hefty said.
"How did you find the village?" Mendette asked them, "I found a red and white bow and Tracker smelled it and found this big wall." The smurf who called himself Hefty said. Clever was being quiet, then he spoke. "Maybe we could meet at the big oak tree tonight at midnight." Clever said, "Okay." the smurfs replied. Then the three smurfs left. "They seem nice." Mendette said smiling at Clever "Yeah." Clever said winking at his friend. Then they hurried back into the village. "Was something over there?" Trendette asked "Uh no....." Mendette said. "Okay." Trendette said.
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posted 05-13-2012 04:51 PM
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