|
Author
|
Topic: how can it be : smurf fanfic
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 09:48 AM
im writing a story about some smurfs i created named Bakette,Sportette,Peacful smurfling,Ninjalette,Gloomette ,Guiltette,and Popstar and some smurfs find them and if you ask ninja smurf is in it even tho he didnt appear in the show or comics so thats it chapter one should be posted in the next post
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 10:20 AM
One day 7 smurfs were gathering ingredients for Papa smurf. Greedy looking for a smurfberry bush but he found some smurfettes wondering around lost." Exuse me " Greedy said "ahhh!!" Screamed the smurfettes Sportette and Bakette coughing because they screamed "who the smurf are you" Sportette yelled " I'm Greedy, Greedy smurf" Greedy said "who are you" he asked " I'm Sportette this is my twin Bakette…" she got iturupted by bakette "Don't touch my things!!!" she yelled when guiltette tryed to take her hat " well thats guiltette , the smurfling is peaceful wait where is she "stripes come here" peacful said to her pet bee " good boy" she said " buzzz" stripes buzzed" thats her pet bee this is ninjalette, popstar and gloomette " she said " Greedy whats going on over there … holy smurfs who are you guys!" Hefty said "I'm not introducing us again so any other smurfs minus well come out" Sportette said " c'mon we need shelter for now i already had to fight a mean old wizard i think it was garbagesmell or something hes in a sack right now " Sportette said "how could you do that?!"Brainy asked loudly "im strong hes weak his cat is small i hit him with a tree branch and stuffed him in a sack" Sportette said " she and ninjalette are the ones who protect us i cook food peacful being the only smurf we know who can talks to animals so we can travel by air or something popstar give entertainment and encouragement guiltette and gloomette collect wood for shelter and food" Bakette said explaining more on what they did to survive " we have to take you smurfs to papa smurf " hefty said " sure whatever is needed" Gloomette said then sighed " why is she so gloomy" sassette asked peacful "she always looks on the negative side not the postive its in her name its almost impossible to cheer her up" peacful said "oh" sasette said
to be continued
hope you liked it
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Jokie Smurf
Jokie Smurf22 / Chloette / Elton John Smurf / My dog Padfoot
Member # 4119
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 10:53 AM
Lol, Garbagesmell you got that from the new smurfs movie didn't you. I like it sportette.
--------------------
When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
Posts: 2871 | From: New Orleans, Louisiana, USA | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
SmurfFan82874
True Blue Buddy
Member # 3926
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 11:01 AM
Not bad, sportette. ![[Big Grin]](biggrin.gif) Will there be more?
The only thing I can suggest is to try breaking it up into paragraphs. Good job otherwise! ![[Wink]](wink.gif)
--------------------
Have a smurfy day!
SmurfFan82874
smurffan@bluebuddies.com
main e-mail: tpennie@comcast.net
secondary e-mail: twpsidewinder74@gmail.com
registered e-mail: nspennie@yahoo.com
Posts: 536 | From: Indiana, USA | Registered: Sep 2011
|
|
Uncle Gargy
Smurfling
Member # 4048
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 11:25 AM
Oy! Less of the Garbagesmell, it's Gargamel :-(
;-)
--------------------
Wizards don't give a 'bleep' about the laws of Thermodynamics!
Posts: 122 | From: England | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 11:45 AM
i did get that from the movie thanks for the tip smurffan
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Tabby Smurf
MrsHandySmurf
Member # 3715
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-30-2011 01:34 PM
Kool!!!
--------------------
Swag is for Boys, Class is for Ninja!!!
Posts: 619 | From: Handy Smurf/ MrsHandySmurf mushroom, Smurf Village | Registered: Jul 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-31-2011 08:53 AM
chapter two:
Back in the village everyone is gathered around Papa smurf for his anouncement. "My little smurfs while some smurfs were gathering ingredients they found other smurfettes i want all of you smurfs to treat them kindly and respectfully they are our guests"Papa said "No its fine just treat us as if youve known us you whole life" Sportette said stepping out "ok if thats how you would like it" papa said
"Why dont you introduce yourselves" he said " sure ok I'm Sportette" sportette said "i'm Bakette sportettes twin" Bakette said " im gloomette" Gloomette said then sighed "hi im peacful and this is stripes my pet bee" Peaceful said with a grin " im ninjalette" Ninjalette said "im guiltette" Guiltette said with her hands behind her back "did you take my hat again?!" Bakette and Sportette said togeher "hehe" she give them their hats "next time youll get tied to a tree" they said together "hi im popstar " popstar said " uhh exuse me " clumsy shouted "yes clumsy" papa said "what is in your ears do you all have them?" he asked "these are earings not all of us wear them well not ninjalette and sportette" Bakette said " oh" clumsy said "where are you from ?" papa asked "we were all lost in the forest after a crane took us there and we met eachother we dont really have a home" popstar explaned
"well you can stay with us as long as you need to" papa said "tailor i need you to make some clothes for them" papa said "yes papa smurf " tailor said " handy you need to make some houses for them and smurflings do you mind if peacful stays with you" "yes papa smurf " handy said "sure papi we dont mind" sassette said " thank you and handy i also need a new bed in the smurflings hut" papa said "illget right on it" handy said " ok if you have any questions you can ask anyone and hefty can you show them around the village" papa said " yes papa" hefty said " follow me" he said
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Amy Sue Smurfette
Nurturer Smurf / The Odd Smurf
Member # 4050
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-31-2011 09:38 AM
very smurfy :-) love guiltette lol
--------------------
we're all someone's little fangirl.
Posts: 903 | From: fah fah aweeey... | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 12-31-2011 10:54 AM
ya shes based on me sorta because i always am taking things but she usually takes hats and i always take my dads and sisters hats ![[Smile]](smile.gif)
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-01-2012 07:55 AM
happy new year!! here is chapter 3:
As they took the tour they went by many things like the library the river smurf and the great oak."well thats the end of the tour" hefty said "ya quick question why is that oak tree so important" Sportette asked "well i never really thought of that sorry i can't really answer that" Hefty said "it's fine just wondering" sportette said "well your houses are done why don't you check them out and peaceful you can meet the other smurflings" Handy said "cool" all the smurfettes said "Peaceful ill lead you to the smurflings hut " hefty said "ok" peaceful said as Hefty lead her to the hut "i'll take you smurfs to your houses" handy said "ok" the smurfettes said "lets go" said bakette "you all have slightly different houses like bakette you have a kitchen in your house and other things i didnt know what to put in gloomettes house so she can just ask what she needs" handy said leading them to their houses" this is sportettes house" handy said "awsome hey handy can you also put some barbells in here i never used them but they sound like something i could use " sportette said "sure i guess" handy said a little suprised she wanted barebells " ok well you may go in to your houses over there is gloomettes house and next to sportettes house is bakettes house and ninjalette your house is over there and guiltette your house is next to gloomettes well you all can go inside and if you have any questions ask me" handy said walking away back in the smurflings hut sassette is telling the other smurflings about peaceful as she then walks in "hi" peaceful said "nice to meet you" she said "this is nat slouchy snappy and sassette and smurflings this is peaceful" hefty said "hi im nat its nice to meet you" nat said "im snappy" snappy said "hi im slouchy" slouchy said "this is my pet bee stripes" peaceful said "cool" the other smurflings said
it has an odd ending sorry about that i was kinda rushing i gotta go
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Amy Sue Smurfette
Nurturer Smurf / The Odd Smurf
Member # 4050
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-01-2012 09:09 AM
yay they all have houses now :-)
--------------------
we're all someone's little fangirl.
Posts: 903 | From: fah fah aweeey... | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Jokie Smurf
Jokie Smurf22 / Chloette / Elton John Smurf / My dog Padfoot
Member # 4119
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-01-2012 09:10 AM
Happy New Year Sportette. I like chapter 3.
--------------------
When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
Posts: 2871 | From: New Orleans, Louisiana, USA | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-05-2012 04:43 PM
ok chaper 4:
Tailor walks in and gives peaceful a dress like smurfette and says the same thing about him able to make something else "its already nightfall" peacful said noticing it outside"oh ya well lets get changed and go to bed" snappy said "ok" sassette said as they got changed "goodnight peaceful"sassette said "goodnight sassette"peaceful said "goodnight slouchy"she said "night peaceful"he said "night everysmurf" nat said "night" everyone else said .
In the morning they woke and had morning muffins for breakfast"ok well off to tailors" sportette said going to tailors hut " hmm gone for day" she said reading the note on tailors door"ill get the others" she said running off "hey guys lets go make our new wardrobe" sportette said to them "ok" they said "what about peaceful?" bakette asked "lets get her" sportette replied they go to the smurflings hut and barge in "peaceful lets go make our new wardrobe" popstar said "ok" she said getting up "can we come"the other smurflings said "fine whatever"bakette said as they all went to tailors " ok first i need your sketches"sportette said and they gave her thier sketches .
She was now finished with the outfits "hey theyre done now lets get changed" sportette said handing out the outfits they now were dressed in the outfits made for them and they were pretty colorful "hello sportette are you home" smurfette asked with hefty and brainy behind her "ya just a second" sportette said in her new outfit "do you need something" sportette asked
"yes but what are you wearing"smurfette said" oh i couldnt stand those dresses so i made this" Sportette said "ya Sportette papa said you need to chop firewood with hefty if you can" Smurfette said "i say i dont need help what are you wearing" hefty said " i made it do you like it" sportette said "its very green" hefty said "green is my favorite color" she said "the other smurfettes have new clothes too" sportette added on "ok well sure ill chop firewood" she added more on and they left to chop the firewood.
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Jokie Smurf
Jokie Smurf22 / Chloette / Elton John Smurf / My dog Padfoot
Member # 4119
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-05-2012 04:47 PM
I am luving this story so far Sportette. Very smurfy.
--------------------
When people say giving is better than receiving they are talking about me. Giving someone one of my exploding presents is WAY better than receiving one. ;)
Posts: 2871 | From: New Orleans, Louisiana, USA | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Amy Sue Smurfette
Nurturer Smurf / The Odd Smurf
Member # 4050
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-05-2012 05:42 PM
yay for new clothes! :-D
--------------------
we're all someone's little fangirl.
Posts: 903 | From: fah fah aweeey... | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-05-2012 05:45 PM
thanks
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
SmurfFan82874
True Blue Buddy
Member # 3926
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-06-2012 08:35 AM
Good job, sportette! I do believe you'r writing is improving. Nice use of paragraphs! Then only thing I can add is that you might consider using more periods to separate your sentences. I look forward to your next installment.
--------------------
Have a smurfy day!
SmurfFan82874
smurffan@bluebuddies.com
main e-mail: tpennie@comcast.net
secondary e-mail: twpsidewinder74@gmail.com
registered e-mail: nspennie@yahoo.com
Posts: 536 | From: Indiana, USA | Registered: Sep 2011
|
|
Archive Smurf
Baraduke Brainy / De-Evolution Smurf / Space Harrier Brainy / Oingo Boingo Smurf / ToonerSmurf Inc. / Smurfus Norsmurficus / Archive Smurf
Member # 2350
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-06-2012 09:04 AM
Sportette, you're fan fic is getting even smurfier and smurfier so far as I continue reading. Keep up the good work!!! I could understand what is going on! I can't wait for the next chapter
![[Sassette Smurfling]](graemlins/Sassette.gif)
Posts: 1476 | From: Canada | Registered: Jun 2008
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-15-2012 12:25 PM
Chapter 5:
While everyone was doing their chores Gargamel was plotting against the smurfs. He was working on a potion to maall the smurfs completely dissapear one by one starting with the oldest.He added the final ingredient and chanted a spell as a spirit came to life.The spirit was to kill the smurfs but he had to find the village.
While the smurfs continued Grandpa was reading the smurflings a story untill he vanished.The smurflings gasped "grandpa hes gone" Nat said "lets tell papa" Oeaceful said and they headed out the door."Papa grandpa dissapeared!" Snappy yelled "what happened" Papa said "he was reading us a story the he dissapeared!" slouchy exclaimed but after that papa dissapeared to "oh no lets look in his books" Peaceful said grabbing a book and it opened by itself to the page with the cure "look at this only twins can fix this smurfs but they have been lost for 167 years we will never find them but it says they cant dissapear" peacful said.
They decided to look for them yet they didnt know the twins were almost right in front of them.It had been 5 hours only about 34 smurfs were there Guiltette and Ninjalette soon dissapeared then Greedy then Grouchy.As soon as only about 10 left. The smurflings were still gone looking for the twins and gave up and went home "we cant find them" Snappy said going home on feathers "we can somehow" Sassette said
"dont argue there are only five smurfs left now other than us" Peaceful said.
They were home and sad only Hefty Handy Harmony Sportette Bakette and them left they told them about the twins and they didnt belive them. Hefty dissapeared and Handy Harmony too they were all sad "what we going to do we never found them" Nat said "wait a minute we have been searching when the answer was righin front of us" Peaceful said "who?" Slouchy asked "the iniatials for their names were S.B. Sportette and Bakette!" Peaceful said "say what?!" the twins said "your them you are probobly the only twins that are smurfs" Sassette said "your probobly right" Sportette said "what do we have to do?" Bakette asked and Snappy dissapeared "i dont know get the book!" Peaceful said then all the smurfs were gone.The twins left alone and they went to get the book.
to be continued...
hope you liked it
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-15-2012 02:11 PM
I have chapter 6 done so here it is!:
The two smurfettes found the book it said "when the twins are found they must have the necklaces their mother gave them a moon and a sun and they have to chant the spell with the rest of their family by the end of the week." Sportette read aloud "wait we have a mom and dad" Bakette said "i guess and they live in a human village they are half human half smurf we have to hurry.They rushed to the human village on feathers with a picture of their parents a smurfette with short brown hair and a father with a lighter shade of brown for his beard they also stay alive during this catastrophie.
They arrived at their parents home they looked like humans but were also smurfs."um hello miss you kinda look like someone we need to find" Bakette said "hello who are you and who do we look like" the woman said "our mom im bakette and this is my twin sportette" Bakette said and showed her the picture.They didnt know she was their mom "oh my smurf your my daughters! i havent seen you guys since you were born and taken away by a mean wizard im your mother my name right now is carla but my smurf name is chefette and your father is sam or sporty its so nice to see you" Carla said "What is going on i am trying to sleep" Sam said "wow he sounds like you at ten in the morning" Bakette said and started to laugh "hey!" Sportette said "im coming in" sam said and barged in the door "who are those smurfs" he said "its sportette and bakette" Carla said "amazing what do you guys need" sam asked.
"you see everyone but us is gone and we are the twins to break the spell it said we had special necklaces a moon and a sun" Sportette explained "i have them come with us do you have transportation to the village" sam said "ya feathers" Bakette said and their parents shrank down into smurfs "well what are you waiting for lets go" Sporty said running twords feathers and everyone else got on as well "we have to go get the necklaces and chant the spell together on top of mt smurf" Sportette said and they were in the village but Chefette ran into Papas lab and went under the floorboards.
She returned quickly with the necklaces" put them on we have no time to lose" Chefette said handing them the necklaces and they put them on "to mt smurf!" Bakette said.In no time they were there on the top of it too."lets chant this thing " Sportette said and they started chanting the spell" the sun the moon and stars above the world thats ours on this day i come to say make this dark mess go away!" as they chanted it they were back in the village with everysmurf including their parents.
to be continued...
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Sparkle
Smurfling
Member # 4204
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-15-2012 03:15 PM
i love it! keep up the smurfy work sportette!
--------------------
Have a smurfy day!
Sparkle Smurfette :)
Posts: 86 | From: Fremont, CA | Registered: Jan 2012
|
|
Amy Sue Smurfette
Nurturer Smurf / The Odd Smurf
Member # 4050
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-15-2012 04:17 PM
good work, sportette ;-) i can't wait to see how this turns out.
--------------------
we're all someone's little fangirl.
Posts: 903 | From: fah fah aweeey... | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Sportette
Bakette
Member # 4102
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-16-2012 06:07 AM
chapter 7:
After everyone is amazed at how they did it and that they have parents."well alls well that ends well" said Bakette.She had an earach from all this noise but was having fun with her sister.As the day ended everysmurf was exausted and everything went back to normal.
Gargamel found that the smurfs had not been gone yet but he said he would do anything.He looked and looked but nothing and he gave up but found a way to get rid of them and they will all be gone with no cure.It was a spell that destroys anything blue. But he had to find a smurf he had a needle that he would use and the smurf will spread it until they are all gone.
Sportette and Hefty were out picking smurfberries until Gargamel got Hefty.Only Sportette heard him and ran to papa she told him what happened as they were on theyre way."hey let me go!" Hefty said "never!" Gargamel said "i need you to spread a disease to kill your kind so hold still" Gargamel said pulling out the needle and it almost went inside his arm until "gargamel put the smurf down" Sporty and sportette yell as they flipped him "well get hefty" bakette said and chefette was already there with hefty free.
They returned to the village and something important came up from baker."hello smurfs this is very important" baker began.
"i have something important too " hefty said "you cut me off" Baker said. Hefty apoligized and let baker finish but it began to rain. They decided they will talk to the two people they need to.They went home and decided if it was a good idea.
to be continued
--------------------
Seether karma and effect
Posts: 2007 | From: Buffalo,NY | Registered: Nov 2011
|
|
Uncle Gargy
Smurfling
Member # 4048
Member Rated:
|
posted 01-16-2012 08:30 AM
Great story! Reads much better now with the paragraphs. What horrid thing am I going to do now and what are you going to do to me?...... (trying not to look like I'm worried) ![[Gargamel]](graemlins/gargamel.gif) ![[Azrael]](graemlins/azrael.gif)
--------------------
Wizards don't give a 'bleep' about the laws of Thermodynamics!
Posts: 122 | From: England | Registered: Oct 2011
|
|
Subscribe to the BlueBuddies RSS Feed.